Pour everything out in a generous first pass, granting yourself permission to meander. Then attack repetition, qualifiers, and soft openings. Merge lines by substituting muscular verbs and concrete nouns. Replace explanation with implication through image and juxtaposition. Ask what your audience must know right now to feel the next beat. If a sentence fails to move time, tension, or character, it is ballast—thank it and let it go.
Pour everything out in a generous first pass, granting yourself permission to meander. Then attack repetition, qualifiers, and soft openings. Merge lines by substituting muscular verbs and concrete nouns. Replace explanation with implication through image and juxtaposition. Ask what your audience must know right now to feel the next beat. If a sentence fails to move time, tension, or character, it is ballast—thank it and let it go.
Pour everything out in a generous first pass, granting yourself permission to meander. Then attack repetition, qualifiers, and soft openings. Merge lines by substituting muscular verbs and concrete nouns. Replace explanation with implication through image and juxtaposition. Ask what your audience must know right now to feel the next beat. If a sentence fails to move time, tension, or character, it is ballast—thank it and let it go.